雅思考官ROD 雅思写作真题范文解析
- 2026-11-01 08:50:13
今天我们讲一篇 Task 2 大作文:“青少年犯罪”,题型是原因对策。全文 4 段,读的时候重点看两件事:下划线词组可以直接搬进你的作文;黄色高亮句是每段的骨架句,决定了这篇文章的逻辑。
PART 01 · QUESTION
真题回忆 · 题目还原
TASK 2 · 题型:原因对策 · 话题:社会问题
"In many countries, a high proportion of criminal acts are committed by teenagers. Why has this happened, and what can be done to deal with it?"
在许多国家,相当大比例的犯罪行为是青少年所为。为什么会出现这种情况?可以采取什么措施来应对?
PART 02 · INTRODUCTION
开头段 · 改写+原因+对策
Teenagers account for a troubling share of crime in some societies. The problem is often connected to unstable homes, weak attachment to education and the influence of delinquent peers, so prevention must give young people stronger support before offending becomes habitual.
在一些社会中,青少年犯罪占比令人担忧。这一问题往往与不稳定的家庭、对教育缺乏归属感以及不良同伴的影响有关,因此预防工作必须在犯罪行为成为习惯之前,给予年轻人更有力的支持。
写法标注
第二句(高亮)一句话给出三个原因(家庭不稳、厌学、不良同伴)和对策方向(提前干预)。
PART 03 · BODY 1
主体段一 · 原因分析
Adolescents are particularly sensitive to their immediate environment. A young person who receives little supervision at home and sees few realistic routes into further study or employment may search elsewhere for status and belonging. Gangs can provide both, while also normalising theft, drug dealing or violence. Exclusion from school makes the situation worse because teenagers lose daily structure and contact with responsible adults. Social media can amplify risky behaviour by turning aggression or criminal stunts into a source of attention. None of these factors excuses an offence, but they help explain why punishment alone has limited effect.
青少年对身边的环境尤其敏感。一个在家里很少受到管教、又看不到继续升学或就业的现实出路的年轻人,可能会到别处寻找地位和归属感。帮派可以同时提供这两样东西,同时也会让盗窃、贩毒或暴力变得习以为常。被学校开除会让情况更糟,因为青少年会失去日常的生活秩序以及与负责任的成年人的接触。社交媒体则会把攻击行为或犯罪噱头变成博取关注的手段,从而放大危险行为。这些因素都不能为犯罪开脱,但它们有助于解释为什么单靠惩罚效果有限。
写法标注
主题句(高亮)说青少年最受环境影响,依次写家庭、帮派、被开除、社交媒体。末句说明原因不是借口,为“只靠惩罚没用”铺垫。
PART 04 · BODY 2
主体段二 · 解决措施
Governments should intervene early. Schools need counsellors, practical courses and alternative programmes for students who struggle in conventional classrooms, rather than relying quickly on exclusion. Youth clubs, sports teams and apprenticeships can connect teenagers with adults who model reliable behaviour and offer credible employment prospects. Families facing addiction, violence or severe poverty require targeted social services. When crimes do occur, courts should combine proportionate penalties with education, treatment and supervised community work. Serious violence must still protect the public, but placing minor offenders in adult prisons can expose them to more experienced criminals and reduce their chance of reform.
政府应当及早干预。学校需要配备心理辅导员,开设实用课程,并为在传统课堂中学习吃力的学生提供替代性项目,而不是动辄开除学生。青少年俱乐部、运动队和学徒项目可以让青少年接触到以身作则、行为可靠的成年人,并提供可信的就业前景。面临成瘾、暴力或极度贫困问题的家庭,需要有针对性的社会服务。当犯罪确实发生时,法院应当把适度的惩罚与教育、治疗和有监督的社区服务结合起来。严重暴力犯罪仍需以保护公众为先,但把轻微犯罪者关进成人监狱,可能会让他们接触到更老练的罪犯,降低他们改过自新的机会。
写法标注
短句开头(高亮)给出总方向,再按学校、社区、家庭、法院分层写措施。最后说明严重暴力仍需惩处,观点平衡。
PART 05 · CONCLUSION
结尾段 · 总结
In conclusion, teenage crime grows where young people lack stable relationships, meaningful education and lawful opportunities. Early support, vocational routes and rehabilitation are more likely to reduce repeat offending than increasingly severe punishment by itself.
总而言之,当年轻人缺乏稳定的人际关系、有意义的教育和合法的发展机会时,青少年犯罪就会增加。与单纯加重惩罚相比,早期支持、职业发展路径和改造矫正更有可能减少重复犯罪。
写法标注
结尾(高亮)对比“早期支持”和“一味重罚”,立场清楚。
PART 06 · VOCABULARY
25 个重点词组 · 中英对照
01a troubling share of 令人担忧的比例
02unstable homes 不稳定的家庭
03delinquent peers 不良同伴
04habitual 习惯性的
05immediate environment 身边的环境
06status and belonging 地位与归属感
07normalise 使……常态化
08exclusion from school 被学校开除
09daily structure 日常生活秩序
10amplify risky behaviour 放大危险行为
11excuse an offence 为犯罪开脱
12intervene early 及早干预
13alternative programmes 替代性项目
14apprenticeships 学徒项目
15model reliable behaviour 以身作则
16credible employment prospects 可信的就业前景
17severe poverty 极度贫困
18targeted social services 针对性的社会服务
19proportionate penalties 适度的惩罚
20supervised community work 有监督的社区服务
21minor offenders 轻微犯罪者
22reform 改过自新
23lawful opportunities 合法的机会
24rehabilitation 改造矫正
25repeat offending 重复犯罪
把下划线词组抄进自己的语料本
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