2026秋外研八年级上册期中试卷写作分析
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继续拆解期中考试真题卷。本篇看看我很喜欢的一份天津卷的作文的拆解分析。


📌写作分析
📌写作分析
这题的主骨架是八上 Unit 1 This is me(认识自我、悦纳自我、成长变化),教材写作维度明确包含"分享成长经历",但六个要点里"理解父母、乐于助人"自 Unit 2 Getting along,"好奇心赋予我勇气"正好是 Unit 3 教材三个观点之一 Curiosity can make people brave——所以这是一道八上 Unit 1–3 的期中综合题。这题最扎眼的矛盾:6 个要点 + 80 词。 一条一句写下来轻松 100 词以上;硬压词数又最容易漏要点。能不能拿高分,全看会不会"合并同类项"。
📌审题两个关键点:
📌审题两个关键点:
- 只有要点①是"过去→现在",其余五条都是"现在的我"。
很多同学一看 My changes 就通篇 I used to...,把"理解父母、坚持锻炼、保持好奇"全写成过去式,逻辑就错了。正确分工:现在完成时总起 → used to 回扣一次过去 → 一般现在时铺开现在。 - 六个要点要"打包"成三组。
逐条翻译必超词数,合并才装得下: 组 A(性格/交流):要点① —— 单独一句,用 used to... but now... 组 B(人际关系):要点②③ —— understand my parents + help classmates,一句并列 组 C(行动与心态):要点④⑤ —— keep exercising + be curious about everything,两句或一句并列 收尾(感受):要点⑥ —— 独立成句,落到"成长"

📌写作拆解:
要点① 害羞 → 享受交流(唯一需要 used to 的一句)
📌写作拆解:
📌写作拆解:
I used to be shy, but now I enjoy communicating with others.
核心结构:used to be + adj., but now...;enjoy doing sth(题目"享受与他人交流"的 enjoy 后必须接 doing) 升级:Although I used to be shy, now I'm confident enough to speak in public.(让步状语从句) 别混:used to do(过去常常)≠ be used to doing(习惯于)
要点② 理解父母 + 每天聊学校生活(参考词 understand)
I understand my parents better and spend more time talking with them about my school life every day.
核心结构:spend + 时间 + (in) doing sth(❌ spend time to talk 是高频错);talk with sb about sth 一句塞进"理解 + 花时间 + 聊什么 + 频率"四层信息,是压词数的关键手法 想加连接的可用 so:I understand them better, so I share my school life with them daily.
要点③ 乐于助人、主动帮同学解决问题
I'm always ready to help classmates solve their problems.
核心结构:be ready to do(主动乐意做)/ offer to help / help sb (to) do sth 与要点②合并成一组"人际关系":I understand my parents better ... and I'm always ready to help classmates ...
要点④ 坚持锻炼、积极参加体育活动
I keep exercising and take an active part in sports.
核心结构:keep doing(坚持做)/ take an active part in(积极参加,比 join in 更贴"积极")/ do exercise regularly 可与要点⑤合并:Besides, I keep exercising and stay curious about the world.
要点⑤ 对一切好奇、好奇心给我勇气(参考词 be curious about)
I'm also curious about everything because curiosity gives me courage.
核心结构:be curious about + 名词/代词(❌ curious of);give sb sth 双宾语 这正是 Unit 3 的观点 Curiosity can make people brave,跨单元调用,阅卷很吃这一句 升级:...because curiosity gives me the courage to try new things(不定式作后置定语,+4 词)
要点⑥ 你的感受(最容易被漏)
These changes are a sign of my growth. I'm proud of myself.
教材金句 These changes are a sign of my growth.直接可用 - myself是 Unit 1 核心语法(反身代词),比 I'm happy高级得多
再升级:I'm proud of the person I'm becoming.(定语从句,冲满分用) 想用感叹句(Unit 1 另一语法点)可收一句:What a better me!/ How much I've grown!,但 80 词的题要留位置
四个高频失分点:
六要点逐条翻译 → 110+ 词,或为压词数漏掉"感受/锻炼";
通篇 used to,把现状写成过去;
参考词没用,或写成 curious of / understand about;
spend time to do、enjoy to communicate、used to doing三类搭配错误;
感受只写 I am happy,没扣"成长/接纳自己"。
📌必备词汇与语法
📌必备词汇与语法

衔接词(6 要点不显堆砌的关键):but now→ and→ also→ Besides / What's more→ In short / Looking back
必备语法点
① used to do ... but now ...(本篇题眼)
I used to be shy, but now I enjoy communicating with others.
⚠️ 否定/疑问:didn't use to;别与 be used to doing(习惯于)混。
② 现在完成时(总起"变化")
I have changed a lot (in the past year)./ I have learnt to understand my parents./ There have been many changes in me.
—— 用 have + 过去分词把"过去"和"现在"连起来,比单用过去时更贴 My changes。
③ 一般现在时 + 频率副词(要点②–⑤)
every day / always / often / usually;主语 I 后动词用原形,第三人称才加 -s。
④ 动词后接 doing 的三个必考点
- enjoy doing
- spend time (in) doing
- keep doing
对比 be ready to do / offer to do / used to do(接不定式)
⑤ 反身代词(Unit 1 核心)
I → myself:I'm proud of myself. / I can look after myself now.结尾一句就能把单元语法点落到纸上 。
⑥ 感叹句(Unit 1 核心,可作加分收尾)
What a better me (I am)!/ How confident I am now!—— 词数紧张时放在"升级选项",不必硬塞 。
⑦ because / although / so(逻辑连接)
- I'm curious about everything because curiosity gives me courage.
- Although I used to be shy, now I'm confident.
📌语法范文与优化:My changes
📌语法范文与优化:My changes
Looking back, I have changed a lot.
I used to be shy, but now I enjoy communicating with others. I understand my parents better and spend more time talking with them about my school life every day. I'm always ready to help classmates solve problems. I keep exercising and take an active part in sports. I'm also curious about everything because curiosity gives me courage.
These changes are a sign of my growth. I'm proud of myself.
三处可升级(词数允许时择一,加一句就得删一处细节):
要点⑤加不定式:...gives me the courage to try new things(+4 词,更有画面); 结尾换定语从句:I'm proud of the person I'm becoming.(比 myself 更显句法功底,但会丢掉反身代词这个单元语法点,二选一); 加一句感叹句收束:What a better me!(扣 Unit 1 感叹句,适合词数还剩 5 词时用)。


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